CELPIP Writing Task 1 Sample Answer: Feedback on Public Park Renovation

Dear Mr. Harrison, Having explored our beautifully revamped park last weekend, I commend the modernized seating and landscaping. Regrettably, the playground’s slide has jagged edges, endangering young visitors, while insufficient trash receptacles have resulted in noticeable litter. These shortcomings compromise safety and diminish the park’s charm for families and residents. I propose a prompt safety inspection of the playground equipment and the addition of strategically placed bins to maintain cleanliness. I’m available to discuss these enhancements in person should you find it helpful. Best regards, [Your Name]

Dear Mr. Harrison, I visited our newly renovated park last Saturday and appreciated the updated seating areas. However, the playground’s slide has rough edges, posing a safety risk to children. Additionally, the limited number of trash bins has led to scattered litter, detracting from the park’s appeal. These issues discourage families from enjoying the space fully. I recommend inspecting and smoothing the slide’s edges and installing additional bins near high-traffic areas. I’d be glad to discuss this further at your convenience. Sincerely, [Your Name]

Dear Mr. Harrison, I visited the new park last weekend and liked the new benches, but I found some problems. The new playground has sharp edges on the slide, which is dangerous for kids. Also, there are not enough trash cans, so litter is everywhere. These issues make the park unsafe and dirty for families. Can you fix the slide and add more trash cans soon? I can meet to talk about this if needed. Thank you, [Your Name]