CELPIP Writing Task 1: Writing an Email

CELPIP Writing Task 1 Sample Answer: Feedback on New Virtual Reality Museum Experience

You recently tried a virtual reality (VR) tour at a local museum. While innovative, you encountered some issues. Write an email to the museum’s program director to share your feedback and suggest improvements.

Time

27 minutes

Length

150–200 words

Tone

Formal or semi-formal, depending on the reader

The question

Required Points:

-Mention when you tried the VR tour and what you liked about it.

-Describe one or two specific issues you faced.

-Explain how these issues impacted your experience.

-Suggest a way to improve the VR tour.

Excellent answer: around CLB 11–12

Dear Mr. Lee, Last weekend’s VR tour at the museum was a captivating dive into history, showcasing remarkable innovation. Regrettably, the cumbersome headsets caused discomfort, and the software crashed twice, shattering the immersive experience. These setbacks frustrated visitors and diminished the tour’s potential. To elevate this offering, I recommend adopting ergonomic, lightweight headsets and rigorously testing the software for stability. I’m eager to discuss these enhancements in person to support the museum’s success. Best regards, [Your Name]

77 words

Good answer: around CLB 7–8

Dear Mr. Lee, I experienced the museum’s VR tour last Saturday and found the interactive historical displays engaging. However, the headsets were uncomfortably heavy, and the software froze twice, disrupting the experience. These issues caused physical discomfort and broke immersion, reducing the tour’s appeal. I suggest investing in lighter headsets and ensuring the software runs smoothly to enhance visitor satisfaction. I’d be happy to discuss further if needed. Sincerely, [Your Name]

71 words

Basic answer: around CLB 4–5

Dear Mr. Lee, I tried the VR tour at the museum last week and liked the history part. But the VR headset was heavy, and the video froze two times. This made it hard to enjoy the tour and gave me a headache. Other people also looked uncomfortable. Can you use lighter headsets and fix the video problem? I can talk more if you want. Thank you, [Your Name]

69 words

The CLBs are estimates of the level each sample was written at, not official CELPIP scores. How we estimate CLB