You attended a swimming competition, but there was an issue with the organization, timing, or facilities.
Time
27 minutes
Length
150–200 words
Tone
Formal or semi-formal, depending on the reader
The question
You attended a swimming competition, but there was an issue with the organization, timing, or facilities.
Write an email to the event organizer. Your email should include:
What you generally thought about the competition.
-The specific issue you encountered.
-How this issue affected your experience.
-Suggestions for improving future events.
Excellent answer: around CLB 11–12
Dear [Organizer’s Name],
I had the privilege of attending your recent swimming competition, which showcased remarkable talent and a lively spirit that made the event memorable. Regrettably, the competitionCont'd experience was marred by two issues: the competition started nearly an hour late, and insufficient seating forced many attendees, including myself, to stand for the entire event.
These shortcomings diminished an otherwise enjoyable day, as the delay disrupted schedules and the lack of seats caused discomfort. To elevate future competitions, I propose rigorous adherence to the planned schedule and an increase in seating capacity to ensure all spectators can enjoy the event comfortably.
Thank you for your commitment to this event. I am confident that with these adjustments, future competitions will be even more successful.
Sincerely,
[Your Full Name]
128 words
Good answer: around CLB 7–8
Dear [Organizer’s Name],
I recently attended your swimming competition and was impressed by the athletes’ performances and the vibrant atmosphere. However, the event began over an hour late, which caused frustration, and the limited seating meant many spectators, including myself, had to stand throughout the competition.
These issues made it challenging to fully enjoy the day, as the delay disrupted my plans and standing for hours was tiring. I recommend implementing better time management practices and expanding seating capacity to accommodate all attendees comfortably in future events.
Thank you for your dedication to hosting this competition. I hope to see these improvements next time.
Best regards,
[Your Full Name]
109 words
Basic answer: around CLB 4–5
Dear Event Organizer,
I attended your swimming competition last weekend and found the races exciting and well-contested. However, the event started 45 minutes late, and there were insufficient seats, leaving many spectators, including myself, standing for most of the time.
This significantly impacted my enjoyment, as it was uncomfortable and distracting to focus on the competition. For future events, I suggest ensuring the schedule is followed closely and providing enough seating for all attendees to create a more pleasant experience.
Thank you for your hard work in organizing the event. I look forward to attending again next year.
Best regards,
[Your Full Name]
103 words
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